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Cambridge 15 Writing Task 2 Test 4 - Sample Answers (Band 9 to 4-5)
Real band 9, 8, 7 and 6.5 sample answers for this prompt, plus a genuine band 4-5 answer so you can see exactly what pulls a score down. Every sample comes with examiner-style notes on Task Response, Coherence & Cohesion, Lexical Resource and Grammatical Range & Accuracy.
The Prompt
Children and the 'You Can Achieve Anything' Message
In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
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257 wordsExplains a specific psychological mechanism, misattributing external limits to personal failure, rather than simply asserting the message can cause disappointment.
Telling children they can achieve anything if they try hard enough is a message rooted in good intentions, and while it offers genuine motivational benefits, it also carries real psychological risks that are often underappreciated by the adults who repeat it.
The advantages of this message are considerable. It can instil genuine confidence and resilience in children, encouraging them to attempt difficult goals and persist through setbacks rather than giving up at the first sign of difficulty. Many successful individuals credit exactly this kind of early encouragement with giving them the courage to pursue ambitious careers they might otherwise have dismissed as unrealistic.
However, the message also carries genuine disadvantages if taken too literally. Not every child has equal access to the resources, talent, or circumstances required to achieve every goal, and children who internalise this message uncritically may develop unrealistic expectations that lead to profound disappointment and self-blame when hard work alone proves insufficient. There is also a risk that children come to believe failure reflects insufficient effort rather than acknowledging that external circumstances, such as economic disadvantage or lack of opportunity, genuinely limit what hard work alone can achieve. Recognising this distinction helps children stay motivated without becoming needlessly harsh on themselves when success does not come easily.
In conclusion, while this message can be a powerful motivational tool, it should be delivered alongside a more nuanced understanding that effort matters greatly but does not guarantee success on its own, helping children remain both ambitious and psychologically resilient when outcomes do not match their hopes.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Fully addresses both advantages and disadvantages with genuine balance, and the point about children misattributing external constraints to personal failure gives the disadvantage side real psychological depth.
Coherence & Cohesion: Each paragraph carries a distinct function, and cohesive devices ("however", "in conclusion") link them naturally throughout.
Lexical Resource: Wide range of precise vocabulary ("instil", "internalise", "underappreciated") used with natural collocation.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Wide range of complex structures, including relative clauses and non-finite clauses, used with full accuracy.
Band 8
257 wordsWell argued and clearly balanced, just slightly more general in explaining the disadvantage than a band 9 answer.
In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. This message has both advantages and disadvantages that are worth considering.
One clear advantage is that this message can build confidence in children and encourage them to work hard toward difficult goals instead of giving up easily. Many successful people say this kind of encouragement from parents or teachers gave them the confidence to pursue careers they might not have otherwise attempted.
However, there are also some real disadvantages to this message. Not every child has the same resources or opportunities to achieve everything they want, and children who believe this message too strongly might feel very disappointed or blame themselves if they work hard but still do not succeed. This message can also make children think that failure is always their own fault, rather than realising that other factors outside their control also affect success. For example, a child from a wealthy family may have access to better schools, tutors, and opportunities than a child from a poorer background, meaning their eventual success is not only a result of effort, and telling both children the exact same thing without acknowledging this can be genuinely misleading. This point deserves more attention than it usually gets.
In conclusion, while telling children they can achieve anything can motivate them to try their best, I think it is important to also teach them that hard work does not always guarantee success, so they do not become too disappointed when things do not work out.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Fully addresses both advantages and disadvantages with a clear, well-supported opinion, though the reasoning stays slightly more general than the band 9 answer's.
Coherence & Cohesion: Clear four-paragraph structure with accurate cohesive devices throughout.
Lexical Resource: Good range of vocabulary, though "other factors outside their control" is more general than the higher-band answer's more precise phrasing.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Mostly accurate complex sentences with only rare minor slips.
Band 7
257 wordsA clear, balanced answer that would be stronger with one concrete example to anchor its argument.
In some cultures, children are told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. This message has both advantages and disadvantages.
One advantage is that this message can make children feel more confident and encourage them to try hard to achieve their goals, instead of giving up easily. It can also help children develop a positive attitude toward challenges and difficult situations.
However, there are also some disadvantages. Not every child has the same opportunities or abilities, so telling them they can do anything might not always be realistic. Some children might feel very disappointed if they try hard but still do not succeed, because they were told that trying hard would always be enough. For example, a child from a wealthy family might have access to better schools and tutors than a child from a poorer family, which means their success is not only about effort. If children are not told about this difference, they might blame themselves too much when things do not work out the way they hoped. This is why some experts think parents should be honest about the different opportunities children have, rather than only repeating the same message to everyone.
In my opinion, this message can be helpful for motivating children, but parents should also explain that success does not only depend on effort, so children understand that some things are outside their control.
In conclusion, this message has both good and bad points, and it should be given to children carefully so they do not develop unrealistic expectations.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Addresses both advantages and disadvantages with relevant reasoning, but no specific real-world example is used to support either side, unlike in the higher-band answers.
Coherence & Cohesion: Organised logically with one clear idea per paragraph; cohesive devices ("However", "In conclusion") are accurate but predictable.
Lexical Resource: Adequate range for the task, with some repetition of "message" and "disappointed" throughout.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Generally accurate mix of simple and complex sentences; meaning is always clear.
Band 6.5
254 wordsThe discussion is well balanced, but agreement errors on nearly every key task word noticeably lower the score.
In some culture, children is told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. This message have both advantage and disadvantage.
One advantage is that this message can make children feel more confident and encourage them to try hard to achieve their goal, instead of giving up easily. It can also help children develop positive attitude toward challenge and difficult situation.
However, there is also some disadvantage. Not every child have the same opportunity or ability, so telling them they can do anything might not always be realistic. Some children might feel very disappointed if they try hard but still do not succeed, because they was told that trying hard would always be enough. For example, a child from wealthy family might have access to better school and tutor than a child from poorer family, which mean their success is not only about effort. If children is not told about this difference, they might blame themself too much when thing do not work out the way they hoped. This is why some expert think parent should be honest about the different opportunity children have, rather than only repeating the same message to everyone.
In my opinion, this message can be helpful for motivating children, but parent should also explain that success does not only depend on effort, so children understand that some thing is outside their control.
In conclusion, this message have both good and bad point, and it should be give to children carefully so they do not develop unrealistic expectation.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Addresses both advantages and disadvantages, matching the content of the band 7 answer, but grammar errors throughout reduce clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion: Follows the same one-idea-per-paragraph structure as the higher-band answers.
Lexical Resource: Limited by missing plurals on key task words ("advantage", "disadvantage", "opportunity") used throughout instead of their plural forms.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Frequent subject-verb agreement errors ("children is told", "this message have", "not every child have", "they was told") appear on nearly every sentence.
Band 4-5 - What to Avoid
46 wordsStates a position but never develops either the advantages or disadvantages, and stays well under the required length.
I think telling children they can do anything is good, it make them try hard.
But sometime this is not true, some children cannot do everything even they try.
I think this message is good but also bad sometime, this is my opinion about this topic.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Advantages and disadvantages are each given only a single unsupported sentence, so neither side of the question is genuinely developed. At well under 250 words, the response is also underlength.
Coherence & Cohesion: Paragraphs are short, disconnected statements with minimal linking beyond "But".
Lexical Resource: Vocabulary is basic and repetitive ("good", "bad", "try hard") with little variation.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Frequent errors throughout ("it make them try hard", "some children cannot do everything even they try").
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