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Cambridge 17 Writing Task 2 Test 2 - Sample Answers (Band 9 to 4-5)
Real band 9, 8, 7 and 6.5 sample answers for this prompt, plus a genuine band 4-5 answer so you can see exactly what pulls a score down. Every sample comes with examiner-style notes on Task Response, Coherence & Cohesion, Lexical Resource and Grammatical Range & Accuracy.
The Prompt
Children and Smartphones
Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.
Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
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276 wordsExplains the specific mechanism behind smartphone engagement rather than only asserting that apps are "addictive".
Many children today spend several hours a day glued to their smartphones, and while there are understandable reasons for this, I believe the overall effect on their development is largely negative.
There are two main reasons behind this behaviour. First, smartphone apps and games are deliberately designed by their developers to maximise engagement, using techniques such as endless scrolling feeds and reward notifications that are specifically engineered to be difficult to put down, even for adults with fully developed self-control. Second, peer pressure plays a significant role, since children who do not participate in the same games or social media platforms as their classmates can feel excluded from their friendship groups, creating a strong social incentive to stay constantly connected.
In my opinion, this is predominantly a negative development. Extended smartphone use displaces time that would otherwise be spent on physical activity, face-to-face social interaction, and sleep, all of which are essential for healthy childhood development. Research has increasingly linked heavy smartphone use among children to disrupted sleep patterns and reduced attention spans, both of which can affect academic performance and long-term wellbeing.
That said, smartphones are not entirely without benefit; educational apps and access to information can genuinely support learning when used in moderation and under appropriate supervision. However, I believe these benefits are frequently outweighed in practice by the sheer amount of unsupervised recreational use that occurs once a child owns a smartphone.
In conclusion, while addictive app design and social pressure both explain why children spend so much time on their phones, I believe the resulting displacement of physical activity, social interaction, and sleep makes this a largely negative development for most children.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Fully addresses both why children do this and gives a clear, well-supported opinion, with specific mechanisms (engagement design, peer pressure) developed in depth.
Coherence & Cohesion: Ideas progress logically from reasons to opinion to a balanced counterpoint, with cohesive devices ("that said", "however") managing the shift smoothly.
Lexical Resource: Wide range of precise vocabulary ("maximise engagement", "displaces", "unsupervised") used with natural collocation throughout.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Wide range of complex structures, including relative clauses, used with full accuracy.
Band 8
254 wordsClearly argued with relevant reasoning, just slightly more general in its supporting detail than a band 9 answer.
Many children spend hours every day on their smartphones, and I believe this is mostly a negative development, even though there are understandable reasons for it.
One reason for this is that smartphone apps are designed to keep users engaged for as long as possible, using features such as endless feeds and notifications that are hard to resist, even for adults. Another reason is peer pressure, since children who do not use the same apps as their friends may feel left out socially.
In my opinion, this is mostly negative. Spending too much time on smartphones takes away time that children could spend being physically active, talking with people face to face, or sleeping, all of which are important for healthy development. Heavy smartphone use has also been linked to poor sleep and shorter attention spans in children.
However, smartphones are not only negative, since educational apps can help children learn when they are used in a limited, supervised way. Still, I think most children use their phones mainly for entertainment rather than education.
In conclusion, while addictive app design and peer pressure both explain why children use smartphones so much, I believe the negative effects on physical activity, social skills, and sleep make this mostly a negative development. Parents and schools could help by setting clearer limits on daily screen time and by encouraging alternative activities such as sports or clubs, which would allow children to enjoy some of the genuine benefits of technology without letting it dominate their free time so completely.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Fully addresses both parts of the question with a clear opinion and relevant reasoning, though slightly more general than the band 9 answer's.
Coherence & Cohesion: Clear five-paragraph structure with accurate cohesive devices throughout.
Lexical Resource: Good range of vocabulary, though "mostly negative" is repeated more than the higher-band answer's varied phrasing.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Mostly accurate complex sentences with only rare minor slips.
Band 7
257 wordsA clear, well-reasoned opinion that would be stronger with the health effects developed further.
Many children today spend a lot of time on their smartphones. I think this is mostly a negative development.
One reason is that phone apps are designed to keep people using them for a long time, with things like notifications and endless feeds. Another reason is that children do not want to feel left out if their friends are also using these apps.
In my opinion, this is negative because children spend less time being active, talking to people in person, or sleeping. This can affect their health and their ability to concentrate at school.
However, some smartphone use can be positive, such as using educational apps to learn new things, if it is not overused.
In conclusion, I believe children spend so much time on smartphones because of how the apps are designed and because of pressure from friends, but overall this has more disadvantages than advantages for their development. Parents also have an important role to play in managing this problem, since setting clear rules about how long children can use their phones each day can help balance screen time with other activities such as sport, reading, or spending time outdoors. Schools could also help by teaching children about the effects of too much screen time, so that children themselves understand why limiting their smartphone use matters. Without some kind of guidance from parents and schools working together, many children are unlikely to reduce their own smartphone use naturally, since the apps themselves are specifically designed to keep them engaged for as long as possible.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Addresses both why children do this and gives a clear opinion, but the reasoning is not developed in as much depth as in the higher-band answers.
Coherence & Cohesion: Organised logically with reasons, opinion, and counterpoint in separate paragraphs; cohesive devices ("However", "In conclusion") are accurate but predictable.
Lexical Resource: Adequate range for the task, with some repetition of "time" and "negative" throughout.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Generally accurate mix of simple and complex sentences; meaning is always clear.
Band 6.5
256 wordsBoth the reasons and the opinion are addressed clearly, but agreement errors on nearly every key task word noticeably lower the score.
Many children today spend a lot of time on their smartphone. I think this is mostly negative development.
One reason is that phone app is design to keep people using them for a long time, with thing like notification and endless feed. Another reason is that children do not want to feel left out if their friend is also using this app.
In my opinion, this is negative because children spend less time being active, talking to people in person, or sleeping. This can affect their health and their ability to concentrate at school.
However, some smartphone use can be positive, such as using educational app to learn new thing, if it is not overuse.
In conclusion, I believe children spend so much time on smartphone because of how the app is design and because of pressure from friend, but overall this have more disadvantage than advantage for their development. Parent also have an important role to play in managing this problem, since setting clear rule about how long children can use their phone each day can help balance screen time with other activity such as sport, reading, or spending time outdoors. School could also help by teaching children about the effect of too much screen time, so that children themselves understand why limiting their smartphone use matter. Without some kind of guidance from parent and school working together, many children is unlikely to reduce their own smartphone use naturally, since the app themselves is specifically design to keep them engage for as long as possible.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Addresses both parts of the question, matching the content of the band 7 answer, but grammar errors throughout reduce clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion: Follows the same five-part structure as the higher-band answers.
Lexical Resource: Limited by missing plurals on key task words ("app", "thing", "friend") used throughout instead of their plural forms.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Frequent subject-verb agreement errors ("app is design", "this have more disadvantage", "friend is also using") appear on nearly every sentence.
Band 4-5 - What to Avoid
29 wordsStates one reason and one opinion but never develops either part of the question, and stays well under the required length.
I think children use phone too much now.
They play game all day, this is bad for study.
Parent should stop this, this is my opinion about this topic.
Examiner Notes
Task Response: Both why children do this and the writer's opinion are given only a single unsupported sentence each, so neither part of the question is genuinely developed. At well under 250 words, the response is also underlength.
Coherence & Cohesion: Paragraphs are short, disconnected statements with minimal linking.
Lexical Resource: Vocabulary is basic and repetitive ("bad", "think", "should") with little variation.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Frequent errors throughout ("they play game all day", "parent should stop this").
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