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Cambridge 20 Writing Task 2 Test 2 - Sample Answers (Band 9 to 4-5)

Real band 9, 8, 7 and 6.5 sample answers for this prompt, plus a genuine band 4-5 answer so you can see exactly what pulls a score down. Every sample comes with examiner-style notes on Task Response, Coherence & Cohesion, Lexical Resource and Grammatical Range & Accuracy.

The Prompt

Long vs Shorter School Holidays

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Band 9

268 words

Answers both questions directly, then adds a genuine judgement call at the end instead of just restating the essay.

Summer break in most education systems stretches to two months or longer, and opinion is fairly evenly split on whether this length serves pupils well. In my view, long holidays offer real developmental benefits, but the case for trimming them is far from groundless.

The value of an extended break lies chiefly in recovery and unstructured growth. Ten months of structured learning leaves both teachers and students in need of genuine rest, and a short two- or three-week holiday rarely achieves this; children return almost as tired as when they left. A longer break also creates space for experiences school timetables cannot accommodate: family travel, part-time jobs for teenagers, or simply the kind of unsupervised play that builds independence and social skills in ways a classroom cannot replicate.

Even so, shortening the summer holiday has a credible case behind it. Research consistently shows a phenomenon known as summer learning loss, where students, particularly those from lower-income households without access to enriching activities, regress academically over an extended break and arrive back needing weeks of revision before new material can begin. Shorter, more frequent holidays spread throughout the year, as several European countries have already adopted, would reduce this loss while still giving families regular opportunities to rest. There is also a practical argument for working parents, who often struggle to arrange childcare for two continuous months.

On balance, I would favour keeping a long holiday but shortening it modestly while adding a further short break elsewhere in the calendar, since this addresses the risk of learning loss without sacrificing the recovery time that a lengthy holiday genuinely provides.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Directly answers both explicit questions (the value of long holidays, and the arguments for shorter ones) with well-developed reasoning on each side, then closes with a clear, considered personal position rather than a simple restatement.

Coherence & Cohesion: Four well-defined paragraphs with natural cohesion ("Even so", "On balance"); ideas flow without needing mechanical signposting.

Lexical Resource: Precise phrasing ("unstructured growth", "regress academically", "a credible case") with strong paraphrase of the prompt's own wording rather than reusing it.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Wide range of complex structures (a semicolon, participle clauses, varied sentence openings) used accurately throughout.

Band 8

270 words

Covers the same ground accurately but plays it safer with vocabulary and doesn't push the conclusion any further than a restatement.

Summer holidays in many countries last for two months or more, and people have different opinions about whether this is a good length of time. I think long holidays have real value, but there are also good reasons for making them shorter.

The main benefit of a long break is that it gives both students and teachers proper time to rest after many months of study. A short holiday of only one or two weeks may not be enough for children to recover their energy before starting again. A long holiday also gives families the chance to do things that are difficult during term time, such as travelling together, or lets older students get part-time jobs and learn skills outside the classroom.

However, there are strong arguments for shortening the summer break too. Many studies have shown that students, especially those from poorer families, can forget a lot of what they learned during a long holiday, meaning teachers have to spend the first weeks of the new year going over old material again. Having several shorter holidays spread across the year, which some countries already do, could reduce this problem while still giving everyone regular breaks. It would also be more convenient for working parents, who often find it hard to arrange childcare for two whole months.

Overall, I believe it would be better to keep a fairly long summer holiday but make it a little shorter, while adding another short break at a different time of year. This would help reduce the amount that students forget without taking away too much of the rest that a long holiday provides.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Both questions are answered with relevant, extended ideas, but the closing paragraph mostly restates the argument rather than adding a final layer of judgement the way the band 9 answer does.

Coherence & Cohesion: Clear paragraphing and logical flow; cohesion is accurate but leans on stock phrases ("However", "Overall") rather than more natural transitions.

Lexical Resource: Good range ("recover their energy", "convenient") but less precise overall than the band 9 answer's more specific vocabulary.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Wide range of sentence forms with good control; rare minor slips that don't affect meaning.

Band 7

261 words

A sound, balanced answer, but the second question gets noticeably less development than the first.

In many countries, schools are closed for the summer for two months or even more, and people don't always agree if this is good or not. I think long holidays are useful, but there are also some good points for making them shorter.

One value of long holidays is that they give students and teachers time to rest properly after a long school year. If the holiday is too short, students might still feel tired when school starts again. Long holidays also let families spend time together, for example going on trips, and older students can get a job during this time to earn some money and learn new things.

On the other hand, there are some good arguments for shorter holidays too. Some studies say that students forget things they learned before the holiday, especially students who don't have money to do extra activities during the break. This means teachers must spend time at the start of the year teaching the same things again. If holidays were shorter but happened more often during the year, this problem could become smaller, and parents would also find it easier to take care of their children during this time.

In conclusion, I think schools should still have a long summer holiday because rest is important, particularly for younger children who need longer to properly switch off from schoolwork, but maybe it could be a bit shorter, with another short holiday added somewhere else in the year. This way, students would not forget as much, but they would still get enough time to relax.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Covers both parts of the question, but development leans more heavily on the first question (the value of long holidays) than the second, which is treated more briefly.

Coherence & Cohesion: Logical order is maintained, but transitions rely on simple markers ("On the other hand", "In conclusion") and some sentences add little beyond what the previous one already said.

Lexical Resource: Adequate range, but "good points" / "good arguments" is repeated rather than varied across the essay.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Mix of simple and complex sentences with generally good control; a few plain constructions and a missing apostrophe ("students who don't" is fine, but similar minor slips elsewhere) keep it just below band 8.

Band 6.5

252 words

The ideas are all there, but several sentences restate a point already made instead of building on it, and grammar slips are frequent.

In many country, school is close for two month or more in summer, and people have different opinion if this is good or not. I think long holiday have value, but there is also good reason for shorter holiday.

One value of long holiday is student and teacher can rest after long time of studying. If holiday is too short, student still feel tired when school start again. Long holiday also give family chance to travel together, and older student can get job in this time to learn new thing and earn money too. This kind of experience is hard to get during normal school week, and it help student grow up and become more independent.

But there is also argument for shorter holiday. Some study show student forget what they learn before, especially student who don't have money for extra activity in holiday time. This mean teacher must teach same thing again when school start, and this waste some week that could use for new lesson instead. If holiday is shorter but happen more time in year, this problem can be less, and parents also find easier to take care their children.

In conclusion, I think long summer holiday is good because rest is important, but maybe school can make it shorter a little bit, and add another short holiday in different time of year. This way student will not forget too much information, but still have enough time to relax and enjoy their summer break together with family and friends.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Both questions are addressed, but the second question's ideas stay close to a restatement of the first ("this problem can be less") rather than becoming a fully separate argument.

Coherence & Cohesion: Progression is followable, but cohesion leans on a handful of repeated connectors ("But", "So"), and the added detail in this answer reads as extra examples tacked onto existing points rather than genuinely new development.

Lexical Resource: Limited range; phrases like "this waste some week" and "find easier to take care" show incomplete control of natural collocation.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Frequent errors, missing verb inflection ("school start", "student still feel tired") and subject-verb agreement ("this mean teacher must"), noticeable throughout, though meaning stays clear.

Band 4-5 - What to Avoid

151 words

States that both sides exist without ever explaining either one: this is what "underdeveloped" looks like in practice.

In many country school close two month in summer for holiday. Some people think this is good, some people think is not good. I want to talk about this in my essay now.

Long holiday is good because student can rest. They is very tired after school finish. Also family can go travel together in this time, this is good for they.

But also long holiday have problem. Student forget lesson they learn before. Teacher must teach again same thing, this waste time. Poor student cannot do activity in holiday so they forget more than rich student.

Shorter holiday maybe better because student not forget much. But also student need rest too, so this is difficult decision for government and school people.

In conclusion I think both long and short holiday have good point and bad point, it depend on what people think important, this is my opinion about this topic.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Only lightly touches both questions without developing either into a real argument: several sentences simply assert that holidays are good or bad without explaining why, and the essay avoids committing to a personal position until the final line, and even then only vaguely ("it depend on what people think important"). At 151 words this is far short of the 250-word minimum, which caps the score regardless of anything else here.

Coherence & Cohesion: No clear paragraph plan: ideas are listed rather than connected, with no cohesive linking beyond "But" and "Also".

Lexical Resource: Very basic vocabulary repeated throughout ("good", "problem", "waste time"); "They is very tired" and "good for they" show confusion between subject and object pronouns.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Serious, frequent errors (subject-verb agreement: "They is", "Student forget"; wrong pronoun case: "good for they") that would noticeably distract an examiner.

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